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Join Date: Oct 2004
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Re: >> BEAUTIFULLY SUICIDAL << NEW STORY!!!
heya!! thnxs for all tha feedback guys.. keep showin me love cuz it encourages me to write better for ya!! *besos*
Carlos-- Because.. *jaw tightens up, then relxas, then tightens up, looking her straight in the eye*
Elena--*looking at him but not saying a thing*
Carlos-- I was 14, and My father was mistaken for a gangster or some shyt like that.. He was a mexican yeah, but he wasnt no thug. He was walking down the street, to the corner store that we had, for some cigarettes I think... Yeah that was it... And.... He was there at tha wrong time, and.....*jaw tightening, then loosins* Well, some thugs where startin shit, and tha cops came out... bullets where shot... and muh dad was the innocent pedestrian..... He was in a coma for 2 weeks when he left us... *Jaw tightening again* I remember at tha funeral, I was sitting with my mom, but she wouldnt even look at me... She didnt want to touch me, be near me, nothing. I guess because I reminded her of my dad, *shrugs* I dont knoe..and I never will... A couple of weeks pasted by.... January 17.... she committed suicide... her note said it hurt too much to be with out her true love.... N I was left to live with my abuelita....
Elena-- *tears sliding down her face* Im sorry...
Carlos-- It was a long time ago...
Elena-- But it still huts like it was yesterday...
Carlos-- *clenches his jaw once more* Yeah I guess..
Elena-- *waiting for what he had to say*
Carlos-- She left me. I mean, I understand if she didnt talk to me for a while... But she killed herself. Without thinkin about me. She had a son to fuckin raise, how n tha fuck could she up and leave me *his hands where in fists, him hardly noticing*
Elena-- Yeah... I know....
Carlos-- I mean are you fuckin serious? How could you only think about yourself and not your son?
Elena-- *nodding* Im sorry Carlos..
Carlos-- *slapped back into reality, back to not showing that he cared* O well shit happens right?
Elena--Yeah soppusivly everything happens for some bullshit reason... And we are left to wonder why...
Carlos-- Yeah i knoe...
Elena-- So this is why you live like this?
Carlos-- *jaw clenching again* Yeah.. tha state pays for everything since my dad died... I only use it when i have to... Im in college right now with their money, but fuck, i would rather have muh family back then just gettin muh fuckin education..
Elena-- *nodding and moving over so that they are sitting infront of each other*
Carlos-- *lookin at her* So thats why i live like this..
Elena-- *Putting both hands on both cheeks on his face* You live like this, and Im glad you do. I dont knoe you well, but Im glad that you dont have it bad like me, your breathing Carlos... your healthy... and look at you... you have it good.
Carlos--*puttin his hands on top of hers holding them* And you dont? Look at you.. your healthy... your breathing.. so yeah you might have it bad, who doesnt? It'll pass you knoe?
Elena---*shakin her head* Theres times when I just wish I wouldnt wake up...
Carlos-- Dont talk dumb shit like that..
Elena-- *noddin her head* I use to be in bed all day... just laying there.... not feeling a damn thing....thinking what tha fuck i was gonna do with my life now...
Carlos-- *touching her face* You can do n e thing you want to do.. if you would just stop bullshittin around and settin your mind straight..
Elena-- *jerking back* I try to.. Its hard... one minute im n a good mood then I see Juan.. and its another story.. we are cool, but sometimes.. fuck, i dont how to explain it..
Carlos-- Juan is your brother right?
Elena-- *nodding* yeah.. I have nightmears of it all tha time... think about it, it happened 3 years ago... and I still have nightmears about it, and I still havent learned to let go..
Carlos-- Because you dont want to..
Elena-- *shrugs, not wantin to talk about n e of this any more* Im gettin really sleepy, so can i crash on your couch?
Carlos-- Naw, you can sleep in muh bed, i'll crash on tha couch..
Elena-- You sure?
Carlos-- Yeah
Elena- Okay.. which room is it?*stands up*
Carlos-- *stands up* come on i'll show yooh.
He leads her down tha hall way, and into a room... She hits tha light switch, and tha whole room brightens up....
Carlos-- *goin to his drawers, getting a white t-shirt and some silk boxers* Here wear this so you can sleep comfortable...
Elena-- Thank you..
Carlos-- I'll see you in the morning
Elena-- *nodding her head*
Carlos walks out of the room, and into the living room leaving Elena there... She stood with the clothes in her hand, just starring at the door... she shook her head, making herself come back to tha real world... she took off her close fast, and put on his clothes that he gave her.... She threw back tha covers.. and got into bed... she got all snuggled up in bed.. and smelt him on his pillows.... She closed her eyes, knowing that she couldnt sleep... she never could anymore... but for some reason..being her in Carlos house actually made her feel..... secure. safe... Before she knew it, she was fast asleep..
It was all so alarming... There were screams coming from everywhere, and there was smoke.. tons of it making Elena close her eyes... trying to escape.. but she couldnt.. her legs where trapped... she looked down.. and saw that she was bleeding... her jens where covered in blood.... she screamed... but nothing would come out... she looked beside her and saw..... Carlos.......... dead... she couldnt move, she tried hard, but nothing would budge, her arms and legs where numb.. she couldnt get ahold of herself... she looked up and saw a pick up coming straight towards her...........she screamed and the lights got closer....and closer.....
Elena- *screaming, covered with cold sweat*
Carlos-- Elena wake up mijita..*holding her*
Elena-- *crying* OMG CARLOS!!
Carlos- im here its okay.. Its okay...
Elena--- You where d... de...dead...
Carlos-- Ssssh... no.. Im okay.. Im holding you...
Elena--It was an-an-another car wr-wr-wreck.... and I co..couldnt move...
Carlos-- It was just a dream mijita.. it was just a dream...
Elena-- Carlos please, por favor, lay with me until I go to sleep...
Carlos-- OKay..
Elena-- Promise you wont leave me until the morning?
Carlos-- Iight I promise..
Elena-- Gracias....
He gets into bed with her, and she snuggles up to him, and he puts his arm around.... He listens to her breathing... and slowly it goes rhympatically, and he knoes shes asleep... he kisses her on tha forehead, and slowly he goes to sleep
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