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Old 09-26-2009, 01:24 PM   #101
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Cant wait till you post more, Im all into this story. You are a really good writter.

KIC..when you can plz.
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Old 09-28-2009, 06:17 AM   #102
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they drove down the street and around the corner a few blocks and stopped infront of a small house.they got out and walked up to the front door and gata started looking thru her purse for her keys.

dominic: this look like a nice lil house
gata: thanks

she opened the door and they went inside.

gata: wait right here

she went into the room and left dominic by himself in the living room.he was looking around and noticed that there were a lot of pictures around the house and he noticed there was lil boy that kept coming up in a lot of the pictures.gata came back with a lil briefcase and some nurse pants and handed them to dominic.she then took out a camera.

gata: stand here against the wall.

he did what she told him and she took a picture of him.she then connected her camera to a computer and started doing some editing.

dominic: so....it this lil boy yours?

he pointed at the lil kid in the pictures

gata: yes

he noticed the house was empty and there wasnt any toys or anything around the house to show that a child lived there.

dominic:whats his name? does he live with the dad?

she stopped typing and took a deep breath,she turned too dominic and had tears in her eyes but she kept trying to hold back.

gata: his name was Joey...and no,the dad ran away like a coward i havent heard from him in years...my joey um

she wiped her eyes

gata: my joey was sick with leukemia...he died last year.
dominic: o dam

she couldnt hold back her tears anymore and they just started flowing down her face.dominic came closer to comfort her.she put her face into his stomach and wraped her arms around his waist.

gata: he was barely going to start 1st grade.even tho he was sick he was a very happy boy.my baby boy was my everything.before him i was always so alone and after i had him he became my life.when he was a baby id spent my nites crying telling him everything that was wrong and even tho he couldnt talk to me,i knew he understood what i was saying.and now....now im all alone again.
dominic: shhhh i know its hard,but your not alone orite.youll never be alone.he will always be alive in your heart and your lil angel is always watching over you.he wont let nothing bad happen to you and will always take care of you because you took care of him the best way you could when he was still alive.

he wiped the tears off her face and she looked up at him

gata: im sorry i was such a bitch to you,i didnt know your daughters sitiuation.i understand now and i respect everything you willing to do for her.dont lose her ok mijo.
dominic:its ok dont worry about it.i wont
gata: ok...ah i didnt want to cry

she wiped her eyes

dominic: its ok,it happens.its better to just let it out.
gata: do you cry?
dominic: (sighs) when i got arrested i used to cry day and nite in my cell.i cried till i couldnt cry anymore thinking about my sick babygirl.that i failed her and she was gonna die because of me.but they day i stopped crying was the day i decided i was gonna do anything i could to save her
gata: dam thats a trip.cuz you look so big and strong,like such a manly man.i didnt think you would cry.
dominic: everybody crys.some guys are just not man enuff to admit it...

they were silent for a bit.

gata: umm ok then uh i gotta get this done for you orite so you could go do whatever it is they got you doing.
dominic: ok then....umm ima step outside for a lil bit,i gotta make a phone call
gata: yea sure go ahead,ill let you know when i finish here
dominic: ok

he went outside infront of the house and took out the cell phone menace had given him.he was trying to call his house but in the time he was locked up he forgot he had to dial 1 before the area code when making a call.

dominic: come on work stupid phone i member the number is (323)123-4567

he kept trying but the operator kept answering

operator: were sorry,your call cannot be completed as dialed. pleae hang up and try....

he clicked

dominic: grrr

he went inside

dominic: ey umm gata,i dont mean to bother you but can i test this phone out by calling your house? i don think its working.

she gave him her house number and he dialed but it didnt work.

dominic: ugh its not working
gata: let me see

he handed her the phone

gata: well yea,you gotta dial 1 before the area code

she dialed her house number and her house phone started ringing.she clicked and handed the phone back to dominic.

dominic: ooo ok my bad thanks

he went back outside and tried calling his house again. it rang.....and rang...and rang...then there was a voice that said "hello?"......
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Old 09-28-2009, 06:24 AM   #103
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Old 09-28-2009, 08:20 AM   #104
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Old 09-28-2009, 06:12 PM   #105
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aaww i hope it was his lil girl that answered the phone and damn gata has been through alot kic n thanxs for posting
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Old 10-01-2009, 06:50 AM   #106
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dominic didnt recognize the voice,it wasnt janets and it wasnt his daughters.it was a mans voice. he clicked and called back thinking he dialed the wrong number but the same voice answered again.

man: hello?
dominic: umm hi,sorry i think i got the wrong number
man: who you looking for?
dominic: umm janet
man: o yes she is right here,and who are you?
dominic:an old friend,who are you?
man: im richard
dominic: ok richard,put janet on the phone
richard: ok just a moment

he yells into the background "babe,theres a man on the phone for you.says he an old friend" theres the sound of footsteps and janet answers the phone.

janet: hello?
dominic: who the hell is richard?
janet: Dom? wait hold up.

she yells into the background

Janet: richard can you please go to the store and buy some more milk?

she emptied a gallon of milk into the sink

janet: we ran out
richard: sure babe, ill be back
janet: take your time

richard left

janet: dominic? what the hell,you the cops are still looking for you.where the hell are you?
dominic: whos richard!
janet: hes my boyfriend
dominic: boyfriend?
janet: well yea me and you are divorced, what you think that i was gonna stay single the rest of my life? im still young and i need help raising Jazzy ok i need a man in my life.

he had flashbacks of back when they were married and happy together when she would tell him

janet: i love you,and your the only man ill ever need in my life
dominic: really?
janet: forever and ever papi

they gently kiss eachother on the lips and then he comes back to reality.

dominic: so theres another man raising my babygurl?
janet: since your not here..yes
dominic: thats not my fault!
janet: well whoeverz fault it is,thats how it is...hes a very goodman tho so i dont want you to worry.he treats me good and loves jazzy as if she was his.
dominic: how does jazzy feel about him?
janet: she likes him.....but your always going to be her father
dominic:.....let me talk to her
janet: ok hold up

there was the sound of foot steps and janets voice saying "honey,daddys on the phone for you"

jazmin: daddy
dominic: hey sweetie,hows my lil angel
jazmin: im otay (she tried to catch her breath) and you daddy
dominic: im ok honey, just working to get you better.hopefully very soon ok honey
jazmin: otay daddy.i found the letter you wrote me
dominic: o yea
jazmin: yea,it made me happy...and i wuv you vewy much too
dominic: haha ok babygurl

gata opened the front door and saw how despite his tough appearance dominic was actually very sweet and gentle.he turned and looked at her.she kinda signaled to him "its ready"

dominic: jazzy,daddys gotta work now but ill call you when i can.i love you
jasmin: otay daddy...i wuv you too

he clicked and then followed gata inside the house.she went by the computer and pointed to the screen

gata: what do you think?......
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Old 10-01-2009, 07:29 AM   #108
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Old 10-01-2009, 06:15 PM   #109
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Keep it coming. Really good story.
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KEEP IT COMING SHADOW!!!!!!!
damn thats sad knowin someone else took your place..
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