Memory Ln.

ThronedImmortal · 09-09-2009, 07:27 PM

Whats up Brown Pride?! I really struggled writing this. Lots of writers block. So, feedback would be greatly appreciated....positive or negative.....

I find myself down memory lane, leaving footprints in every blood stain. I’m lost in familiar places. I see a cross with unfamiliar faces. No one told me it was time to move on. I still catch myself humming our favorite song. Those old feelings, yeah they strike like lightning. Can’t control the flow when my heart gets to writing. I guess you never knew and you never will, that I’d die for you and even kill. Those were the thoughts of a once mad man. That crazed individual that once held your hand. Now my body’s an empty vessel. No place for comfort just a place where demons wrestle. I’m paralyzed. My eyes fixated. Starring down a barrel thinking life is overrated. Broken beyond repair, what once held me together is no longer there. Am I delusional? Your picture speaks to me. I’m institutional. I’m drowning in fear without a life boat. It’s been so long and I still can’t cope. You’re gone, moved on and I’m stuck in time, conveying all my pain into every line. My sanity is now just a thing of the past and your imprint on my heart will always last. Its a scar that'll never heal. I find myself down memory lane........these are all the things I used to feel.

triste_estrella · 09-09-2009, 07:55 PM

DAMN THATS DEEP....
ITS GOOD

PEl0N.Z_HyNA17 · 09-09-2009, 08:48 PM

really nice; its better to let go,not all realtionship turn outt that way you wanted them too. keep your head up && smiles

13traviesa · 09-10-2009, 01:28 AM

Damn, thats one of the best drops I've seen in a long time! Straight up that was deep and I felt every word. Much props.

.:l4dyy Gi!ggl3zZ:. · 09-10-2009, 01:42 AM

danm i digging thizz
ii kan relate to dizz soo much ii know wat u goen thru
but its all good da best things is to move onn
keep ya head up ight
much props

ThronedImmortal · 09-11-2009, 02:49 AM

thanks for the feedback. even though it sucks to be able to relate to it, at least we know we are not alone. life isnt short, but it seems like it can be sometimes. experiences, whether they be good or bad, is something we all need whether we like them or not. its good to know there is a site such as this one to realease some of that energy, if that makes sense to ne one.

M1KL0 · 09-11-2009, 06:47 PM

ey carnal, thats powerfull. weather you can relate to it or not is irrelevant, you can feel the pain on every line. not everyone can write like that. thats pure talent.

viribamba_y_ojosvan · 09-11-2009, 08:17 PM

even after many failed relationships keep on trying the right person might come along....

vixen3989 · 09-15-2009, 10:28 PM

one of the best ive read..that was real deep

ELSHYDREAMER · 09-25-2009, 02:41 AM

hey homess....now thats talent.. more than one can relate to this including myself...1 way or another...much propz 4 u...keep lines like this comming.....
nd keep ur head up....