Re: OLD AJE VS. DOPE
Well Insyt pretty much summed it up well...but....
Old Aje....
FAVORITE LINES....
"Cuz I write witta knife
And strike like a bear witta ferocious bite
This aint a damn game Bitch your flow is a shame
Im a steal ya damn life like you stole ya name"
This was the best part of the verse. Now, the "I write with the knife" line...Im gonna take that as your carving letters with your knife. I get it, its still nothing devastating tho. Nothing really directed at your oppenent, your opener was soft and a heavy hitten closer was none existent. Only good thing about your piece was that it flows well and in a text battle, that really dont mean much. Its just boring when your rhyming chest, vest, best and name, game, shame...and nothing exciting for the set up either.
ODM
FAVORITE LINES.....
"Get rid of me? i'll take the 1st bar, n then spar wit a flip of context
Punches'll leave ya cut-up, like I got spikes on the tip of gauntlets
Let ya know, when im on set, I stay strong wit a dose of raw text
N im a lyrical "extremist", like politicians staying on the "far left"
I keep jabbin till theres no barz left, how much heat you packin?
Them wins you wont be rackin when your the weakest of the bracket"
Opener was okay, you can almost see the punchline coming, I did like the set up for it tho. As for the body, theres fillers like insyt said, but still a solid piece. The closer was...hmm...it was okay..I wasnt really feeling it...but I do like reading your pieces cuz I never know what the punchline is going to be. If I could say where you can improve on, would be the set ups for the punchlines. It seemed that you would throw us in one direction...and the punchline came from a different direction.
My Vote: ODM
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